rate_review Reviews

Oh my gosh! I love your stories and just found them today. I don't know if you're still around because it's been a few years since you posted these but please continue writing more about Ms. Lace and her students. I will read and review them every time you post. PLEASE COME BACK! Oh, and don't listen to the negative reviewers they don't know shit and your stories are just fiction/fantasy so you can do what you want with the characters.

Again I like the idea of the story. The story itself doesn't seem very plausible or believable, but hey, it's fiction, so who cares. Look forward to reading the next part.

Hey what a great story. ^_^. Can't wait to read more. . . Will read soon.

Hi, me again. . . I thought of something that I didn't put into the last review. . . (Which is to say no helpful hints at all oops. . .) Anyway. . . Something you might try is make Amy's plight a little more believeable. Ten bucks would not be good enough, for most people. You should possibly think about making the son of the slave trader keep her for his own or something. Also. . . The detail, I thought really helped and made this story work. I am a wordy writer too, my stories don't really show it yet but there you go. Don't let those who would tell you it is too much detail discourage you. And you get better with practice. Try useing different phrases for things also. Like instead of cock, use member or something like that. Just gives your story a little variety, and you as the writer a little room to play with the way you write. ^_^ Not flaming your story, just thought, from one writer to another, these things might help you. But hey it's your story dude. Happy writting!

Wow. Nice story. You should make the next one for sure. It\'d be somethin\' if that really happened at school. Say, if Amy were so hot, why\'d they pay her off? Meh, it\'s your story. Perhaps she\'s in store for somethin\' else. I dunno, but this is good enough for continuation. You just gotta find ideas.

Don\'t be discouraged by people who say it\'s too descriptive. It isn\'t overly descriptive at all. It\'s fine really. Besides, there\'s nothing wrong with description. It helps the reader know what the hell you\'re talking about. Stories with no description confuse the people who read it. You did a good job with the story... though it was a bit of a shocker at first. Just ignore what Anon said in his review. This was sorta creative. Not the best in creativity, but it\'s better than those lame allyway rape fics wortha\' setting. Just be descriptive, and try to be a little more believable to people who read it (that part with Amy, unless you perposefully did that as part of the story). I\'d like to see the next of this. It\'s not too bad.

that was sick but the story was good hope to see a sequle

Eh, it was ok, I guess. Wasnt that bad actually, although it seemed more cartoonish/comical to me. Didnt seem serious at all, I donno if that would really happen or anything, but who knows, there are some strange people out there. Anyways, you\'re a good writer, im just not into fics that make me think of one of those weird japanese animes, yet thats why I read it to begin with lol, I saw an anime that reminded me of this story, so I decided to look at it out of curiousness. I rated it pretty high anyways, because its pretty good as far as writeing goes.

Not a bad story, though the part about paying Amy only ten buck to stay quite was fairly weak. Now, if she was given to one of the boys as a slave, that would have been more beleiveable. As far as writing a sequel, I say go for it.

This is probably one of the most horribley written things I have ever read, I couldn\'t finish it. 1. Too much detail \"Her boobs were a c cup\" that isn\'t necessary. 2. The story line is ridiculous and highly uncreative 3. You just aren\'t a writer, sorry mate.