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for Changing the guard

by PR903E

person RanmaXXX
schedule August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NEED A SEQUEL!!
person Anon
schedule July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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person me
schedule May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, that was actually really good and well-written.
only story I\'ve read with toddlerkon, too.
person Ashley
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, it was a well written story for sure except for one little part.

You portrayed the 12 year old daughter too immaturely. Now a days, 12 year olds say penis and dick not pee pee. I just felt that a 12 year old would know much more about sex then the way you had your character know.
person Carrie
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh that\'s hot
person primeboob
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A good story, but I was disappointed with the ending. I expected the man and daughter to join the wife and grandfather so we can have a really happy ending. I would not have asked for a divorce. I would have the 4 of us to have sex on that bed.
person primeboob
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not only that, I would have liked to see the man screw his new daughter when she\'s of age as well as the wife doing the same to her son.
person Anon
schedule May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
look, I, unlike some others, don\'t mind the whole writing about child porn and all that, not because it isn\'t sick, but because overall no one gets hurt, its all fantasy. But put a warning, somewhere in your summary or in the first paragraph for those of us who hate that kind of stuff. please.
person sammo_00
schedule May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! That\'s all I can say, and I haven\'t yet decided whether it\'s a good OMG or a bad OMG. Either way, it was still well written. Good job.