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by kaha

schedule February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is pretty good!
person ChrisDawg88
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good stuff from what I could read of it. Half the dialogue was in Japanese.
person fruity
schedule November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I (and I\'m sure some other people) have a problem with Japanese being used in stories, and then suddenly switching to English. Did you not know how to say the rest of the first telephone conversation in Japanese? then I suggest either sticking with full (romanized) Japanese, or keep it all at English.
person paige
schedule June 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Short maybe, but very good. I already dig this plot and your writing is exceptional.
person Sarah
schedule May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit. You write just like Koushun Takami. Especially that part at the end of the first paragraph, \'fuck the rest, especially them\'. It\'s a lot like something Shuya said at the end of Battle Royale the book...well, whatever./
person paige
schedule May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting start. I liked it. And you\'ve made me more intruiged with Japanese culture. Like men paying girls to date them?! Sounds like the same crap we have over here in America, except over here we call them hookers. Lol. anyway, update soon, okay?
person Taichi
schedule May 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very different with a more honest outlook on the Kogal sex craze in japan. I\'m looking forward as to how your going to go with this. Update soon!
person daesare
schedule May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wh00t! I like it alot, only thing is I don\'t speak a lick of japanese and all i really got out of te conversations was \'cute\' \'Good?\' and \'Bye\' O.o Nevertheless, I demand you write more or else I will slap you with lunch meat. Fear the salami.
person Angelina
schedule May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I like the beginning, the Japanese makes it cool!
:)

Anyway, I would love 2 beta 4 you!

:)
person sexykagome03
schedule May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This sounds like it may be a potentally interesting story. I\'d really like to help you with this! So, could I be your Beta? ^_^; Even if you pick someone else, great story! I hope to see more of this project soon!

^_~ rock the world!

~sexykagome03