rate_review Reviews

Not really digging it.

i love your story and all...but can you PLEASE PLEASE fix the one whole chunck of paragraph with dialogue AND narration problem??? i can\'t read properly and my eyes are about to fall off...as much as i like your stories....having to read like that really isn\'t good on the eyes -_-;; in case you haven\'t noticed... your first chapter had only 3 or 4 paragraphs and each paragraph is like more than an inch thick O_O my eyes were watery when i finished reading that!!

just a warning...not many people would like to read something that isn\'t spaced...set out...displayed...formated (whatever) nicely, they\'ll just chuck it away and go read something else... (i just thought i might warn you about that ^^ no offence)

Awsome. i love it, keep going. can\'t wait to read about the dude that laughed at Tej, will he get his ass kicked? update soon

well...i tried to read the story, really i did. it looked mighty interesting and i liked the concept. the only problem was that it\'s hard to read when everything is in just one big paragraph! if you could please format it to be easier to read (i.e. a new paragraph for each time someone speaks, making new paragraphs when needed throughout the story) then i would love to read it! thanks so much and please don\'t take it as a flame!

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I want u to choose #1, as u can see. It\'s getting really good. keep going with this. I especially liked how Tej finished off his dick. I like the pixy thing too, she\'s funny. update soon.

I enjoyed it but you really need to write more and shorten the chit chat at the top