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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Try not to use run-on sentences, and add more to the story; currently this isn\'t much of anything. But other than that, good start.
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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
more please
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June 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good start i want to see this finished
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thats not a chapter, its the beginning of a chapter. Nothing wrong with it otherwise... I suggest you wait until you have enough to be worth reading to post
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
three is no way in hell he is just giving her a physical
update this story soon
update this story soon
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May 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like where it\'s going. Try to make it longer:)
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooh...i wanna see more of this. i like where this is going...
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Looking good!
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April 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
CONTNUE!! it sounda cool.. plz go on!
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April 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
write more plz?