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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok ... i started reading this story a time ago, but when i looked at your last chapter (which at those times was the 17th) i just couldn\'t read anymore, because i needed a happy ending^^ .. so i looked every day at this site to check on your story... know that it\'s complete i sooo happy and just have to review!!!
ok .. so i love those characters!! they seem to very intelligent and they are a very different type of what i have read before. ... i mean the whole thing with their music taste and the books and writtings .. their witty remarks ... a asume you are the same type as they are, because of your knowledge about all those books and music ^^ ...
the story was just beautiful, i really enjoyed reading it ... it\'s really very nice to read of such people as of people who live for sex, parties and what not .. as most of these stories here are (not telling every fic ... just most of them)
and the end was very ... unexpected, at least for me .. but a beautiful vision ... well .. i would\'t have anything against about finding out if they got children, though it\'s not their character ... it will be nice^^ ... but the story is perfect as it is now!
ok .. just wanted to tell you this and thnk you for the fic!!
by the way: i love the song november spawned a monster ... but i also have nothing against no doubt (maybe because i\'m young and their are in now .. or their type of music ...) but i really do like the older songs .. they make me happy^^
bye bye ^_____^
ok .. so i love those characters!! they seem to very intelligent and they are a very different type of what i have read before. ... i mean the whole thing with their music taste and the books and writtings .. their witty remarks ... a asume you are the same type as they are, because of your knowledge about all those books and music ^^ ...
the story was just beautiful, i really enjoyed reading it ... it\'s really very nice to read of such people as of people who live for sex, parties and what not .. as most of these stories here are (not telling every fic ... just most of them)
and the end was very ... unexpected, at least for me .. but a beautiful vision ... well .. i would\'t have anything against about finding out if they got children, though it\'s not their character ... it will be nice^^ ... but the story is perfect as it is now!
ok .. just wanted to tell you this and thnk you for the fic!!
by the way: i love the song november spawned a monster ... but i also have nothing against no doubt (maybe because i\'m young and their are in now .. or their type of music ...) but i really do like the older songs .. they make me happy^^
bye bye ^_____^
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was an amazing story. i can only hope you write more, if only for the music reccomendations.
thank you!
thank you!
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was such a great story I\'m sad to see it end..I hope you write a spin off
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww sweet ending and i loved this bit:
“I’m not cute. I’m fierce.”
“Yes, my mistake. You’re like a ninja,” she apologizes ..... LMAO!!!
Would be cool to read a Vincent spin off btw.
“I’m not cute. I’m fierce.”
“Yes, my mistake. You’re like a ninja,” she apologizes ..... LMAO!!!
Would be cool to read a Vincent spin off btw.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was perfect. I hope you fully understand what a phenomenal writer you are, because it is extremely rare for people to possess the kind of gift you do. I think a story about Vincent would be interesting, although I would read anything you choose to write.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAY! She went!! WoO This story was terrific! Keep up the great writing!
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September 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
man i really like this story but please the suspense is killing me i have to know what is going to happen if she can;t attach herself to him or if she goes with him and lives happily ever after or some shit like that that most people want including me ha ha but i would very much like it if you would finish or update soon please please please thank you if you do and if you don;t can you at least give us an answer of when it will be done please and toodles
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September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooooooooo what a clify!!!!!!!! pleas update soon!!!!! this is one of my ultimate fav stories and I can\'t wait for the end! i would so marry fin in a heartbeat. hmmm...come to think of it i\'d marry miranda in a heartbeat too...hehe just kidding, but really i love them both. kk bybys
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September 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant! Absolutely brilliant! You write the relationship so well. I\'m crushed that it\'ll end next chapter! I envy your ability to write romance so well. And my commiserations, I hope your buddy in New Orleans got out in time and will be OK.
Now, you are a very good writer, so don\'t take any of this as criticism. I myself always want feedback so that\'s what i\'m trying to provide:
* You describe Finn very well. But you give less detail to the other charcters, especially Miranda, I have a hard time picturing her. Perehaps something could be done about that?
* I love Vincent! But maybe thats because i\'m British... and the accent really does help pull birds here in the USA... but its commonplace in Britain, so ikt would be funny to have Vince crash-and-burn in London. It would be neat too to have him acknowledge that Finn has it better, having one girl he loves. In reality most guys like that are covering for something, like a fear of intimacy, emotional problems.
* Marcus and Krissy have to get together! Hell, theres a whole spin-off there...
* Don\'t feel you need to rush your chapter updates. A well-thought out good long chapter will please the readers much more in the long run than a hastily written one.
* I don\'t get all the music/movie references, but, I don\'t care. You make all the pop culture references you want! Thats part of your writing and your characters. Anyone complains, tell \'em I said they\'re a bloody pillock and they can kiss my arse. Or yours.
Just some of my thoughts. Ignore \'em or use them. And keep writing! You have to do another story when you finish this. You have real talent. I\'m not usually much impressed by romances, especially the ones found on aff.net, but this is a diamond in the coal pile.
Should you ever want for ideas or a proofreader, I offer my services.
Spike.
Now, you are a very good writer, so don\'t take any of this as criticism. I myself always want feedback so that\'s what i\'m trying to provide:
* You describe Finn very well. But you give less detail to the other charcters, especially Miranda, I have a hard time picturing her. Perehaps something could be done about that?
* I love Vincent! But maybe thats because i\'m British... and the accent really does help pull birds here in the USA... but its commonplace in Britain, so ikt would be funny to have Vince crash-and-burn in London. It would be neat too to have him acknowledge that Finn has it better, having one girl he loves. In reality most guys like that are covering for something, like a fear of intimacy, emotional problems.
* Marcus and Krissy have to get together! Hell, theres a whole spin-off there...
* Don\'t feel you need to rush your chapter updates. A well-thought out good long chapter will please the readers much more in the long run than a hastily written one.
* I don\'t get all the music/movie references, but, I don\'t care. You make all the pop culture references you want! Thats part of your writing and your characters. Anyone complains, tell \'em I said they\'re a bloody pillock and they can kiss my arse. Or yours.
Just some of my thoughts. Ignore \'em or use them. And keep writing! You have to do another story when you finish this. You have real talent. I\'m not usually much impressed by romances, especially the ones found on aff.net, but this is a diamond in the coal pile.
Should you ever want for ideas or a proofreader, I offer my services.
Spike.
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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this story. I get sucked into their world of playfullness and witty banter. And I love his shirts. And the fact of the little English things in the story. I can\'t wait til you write more. =D