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April 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it, no matter how short it is! I would give you some kind of constructive critisism, but I can\'t find anything wrong with the story, grammatically or otherwise. Short, sweet, to the point, over the angst...for now, I\'m assuming ^_^ Great work! No pressure, but keep writing!
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April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I actually really like the fact that this story is in present tense. If anything, past tense is the tense for summaries. Present tense makes this story flow and more suspensful.. in a way.
I really like this story. Update soon!
I really like this story. Update soon!
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April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
\"Realized last night that my deck was missing a Queen.\"
Honestly, my jaw dropped. Fucking awesome.
Honestly, my jaw dropped. Fucking awesome.
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
loving it so far
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, I love a witty writer. You do so well at creating this wonderful banter between the two characters while still keeping them real, not cheesy. It sucks that you\'re at a place in the story that you don\'t like, but my motto is just keep writing! It will eventually work itself out. Great work!
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I\'m officially addicted to this story. I have to check this website at leat 2-3 times a day to make sure that I haven\'t missed an update. I absolutely love the story and love the way you convey the characters. I can\'t wait for the next update!
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April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this a lot. I like the way your characters play off of each other, the way they are described. They are very...real, for lack of a better word. I have no complaints about the story. It\'s clean, concise, and, thankfully, you never drift out of tense (one of the only things that can absolutely drive me insane!) Good so far...can\'t wait to see more.
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April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heya
I just wanted to say that I really love your story. I like Finn\'s character; calm, composed, self-assured...isn\'t that what we would all like to be? haha
Anyways, I hope you will continue the story when you\'ve got some time...
julie
I just wanted to say that I really love your story. I like Finn\'s character; calm, composed, self-assured...isn\'t that what we would all like to be? haha
Anyways, I hope you will continue the story when you\'ve got some time...
julie
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April 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
eep! you must continue...i\'m so in love with this pair right now
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April 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story. I freakin\' love the characters. You have great talent in conveying your characters\' emotions and making them seeem real; not 2 dimensional. You also have great talent. I hope you update soon because I\'m dying of anticipation. Great job!