rate_review Reviews

i like it... once again i am surprised at the twist and turmoil you place your characters in... and its only the first three chapters... keep writing... i thought you said it wasn\'t edited... its well written and corherent...
keep writing...

great work! well written, love the idea... soooo sweat! can\'t wait till the next chapter!!!!

Wow, if this is a rough draft...
Ok, I\'m hooked. It\'s a clever story, and the characters are (the ones) are intriguing. I like that your protagonist isn\'t your typical, garden variety hero. He\'s bitter, caustic and ironically misanthropic--considering his profession--but it just makes it more impressive when he does something heroic.
As far as your writing is concerned...well I\'ve tried to wade through some of the fics posted on this site or others, and I think I can safely say you are far more than simply adequate at writting. It wasn\'t overly wordy with the imagery, it was all very clear, and well written. I don\'t think you need to have that disclaimer in the begining, you should take pride in your work! It\'s great! I hope you keep writting.

Another brilliant chapter! I\'ve started reading Blurring The Lines, and it has me completely captivated. You really have a great talent. I can\'t wait for more.

I love this! And you shouldn\'t be so hard on yourself about grammar and spelling. I saw very few mistakes and the style in which you write is lovely. You really bring your characters to life! You describe the settings in such a way that they feel so realistic! Wonderful, really. I can\'t wait to read more.

YAY! Second story from you! Makes me a happy camper!!

It took me a little longer to get into this one (THREE whole paragraphs this time! Shock! ;) ) I think I\'m going to like where you\'re going with this. The character of \'Alice\' is going to be great. I can already tell. I can\'t wait to find out his story and how he ended up where he did. And Tom\'s story, for that matter. I\'ll definitely be watching for the update to this! Great job, as usual!

**Zeph**

HELLO!

i\'ve actually been following this story on your website, and sent you a way to sappy email about how much i loved Blurring the Lines, but well, i like to think people appreciate encouragement. As for this story, i love it also! I was glad to see you even switched from sci-fi-ish story to a more historical one. I love the variety.

I like the begining of this story. I hope you continue it soon. There\'s not much fiction on this site that I actually look forward too.

Again, please continue soon. I\'m not a pathient person.

SI

I\'m not usually one to review, but, I must say this. I found Blurring the Lines a little while ago, but I waited and didn\'t read it until it was actually completed. I started it on Saturday, and I finished it today. I would have read it in one sitting had I could. I loved it, and I want more..lol... even if it is a Pwp between Toshi Mick and Andy ...lol :D Anyway, because of how much I liked that one. I jumped on this fic, :D It\'s just beginning, but you have a knack for characterization and I like your writing style. It\'s smooth and almost flawless.

Keep up the good work I can\'t wait to read more :D

~Innocent Moonlight

So glad to see you progressing on this lovely ficcie already! I\'m already falling in love with the characters after reading the chapters posted on your site, looking forward to more developements!