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April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad...try to write more for each chapter & develop the characters more, make the characters more deep. try not to just tell us stuff, but write it in a way to draw an audience & make us feel what the characters are feeling. one last thing, the point of view isn\'t clear cuz you\'re writing in 3rd person in one sentence & first person in another. good job overall for a first timer, but those are just some tips that i think will help you develop your writing skills & techniques to make the story better. update & continue to write!!