rate_review Reviews

well done, somewhat reminicant of classical asian love stories. quickly progressive, might have been more gripping had it had a slower plot progression. also the intro kinda gives it away, assuming that your audiance is adultfanfiction.com u should assume that the reader has an idea of they are getting themselves into. overall well done, descriptions were a little rough, the language could be more...well i guess flowery is a good for it. good first shot

This story is good. I do think it should have been longer, and we should have had time to get to know the characters a little better. It felt a little rushed, but a good story none the less.

Excellent story. I love the detail in the setting and the relateable dialogue. The suspense is killing me. Write more!

I enjoyed this story you should really write more. I hope to read a Sequal
~love, peace and all that jazz~