rate_review Reviews

Your going straight into talking and stuff without having any details. There are no names or explanations for anything. But, i think that if you added some detail and back ground in, it would sound alot more better.

**Tears up** Cant believe it.. **sniffle** Vampire\'s perogative **sniffle**
Love it... some much more realistice in my point of view - of what a vampire is/ can do- ever read Christine feehan... i think that her books can\'t be that far off.. personally i wouldn\'t mind a vamp to nibble on my neck a bit, but that is just me-- mind it cant be the \"true\" undead.... Keep your story rolling and i will keep on reading..

i really like the story. nice job! pweeeeeeeeze continue! =3

i see a really great story in your my mind, but your format is bad...and be more descriptive.....one line there in a cab the next she is already packing bags?.....thats crazy......oh and pleze if the chapeters are going to be that short then u might as well put 3 or 4 together....bye

It was a great story and everything, but when the chapters are only well you know very small as you put them, it gets very boring and people start to lose interest. I dont know if its a good story because im use to reading paragraphs that are bigger then chapters 123 and 4 put together. So far so good though, but please a little bigger next time?

the chapters are insanely short and i have no idea what\'s going on. rewrite, start over, or merge a bunch of chapters into one. a good transition point is not a good chapter split if it occurs ten lines into the chapter, unless it\'s a brief interlude between longer chapters.

Omiko my dear friend. It was good. Although.....I read it last year!!! On the bus remember? And it is short for AFF standards. But hell mine are considered short to some. Go with it your own way and don\'t give a shit. Although I still havn\'t read the other chapters. So I\'m exited about the update.