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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
;-; It\'s finish. I is so sad. :/ Will there be a sequel?
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dear Sarah,
I just wished to tell you that this has been an absolutely amazing rush. You put together this sinful AU and created such wonderful, detailed characters that no one would hesitate falling in love with. I would love to know where you got your inspiration and how you wrote it up so quickly. Or perhaps you had it written up already and were simply pasting at very close intervals. Whatever it is, I thank you so very much for taking the time to put your imagination to paper, or as the case may be, word processor. I guess I\'m lucky, its not very often I come across something so worthy of a standing ovation, Congradulations on this spectacular work of art.
There are a few things I would work on though. First of all, I don\'t know if it\'s just me but I have looked and still I have no idea what I/S stands for! Try to reiterate key points as much as possible without having it get too repetative. Another thing is clerification. What the hell is an Inky Commune? Why were those that got the mutated genes called Incubi and Succubi? Maybe you should have worked up the whole \'smells right\' aspect a little more. The idea is great but for all its importance it was just not given its due credit.
Oh, I\'m sorry. I seem to have went on rambling like I usually do. Please don\'t take my criticism too seriously. I only wish to make it clear that what could be worked on is only minor and that overall your work is totally amazing! I adore your writings and I hope to any higher power that is listening that you will soon put out something else I can drool over. Don\'t let Toshi and Mick fade into cyber space, work with them. Make them immortal. Thank you.
- Arundel
I just wished to tell you that this has been an absolutely amazing rush. You put together this sinful AU and created such wonderful, detailed characters that no one would hesitate falling in love with. I would love to know where you got your inspiration and how you wrote it up so quickly. Or perhaps you had it written up already and were simply pasting at very close intervals. Whatever it is, I thank you so very much for taking the time to put your imagination to paper, or as the case may be, word processor. I guess I\'m lucky, its not very often I come across something so worthy of a standing ovation, Congradulations on this spectacular work of art.
There are a few things I would work on though. First of all, I don\'t know if it\'s just me but I have looked and still I have no idea what I/S stands for! Try to reiterate key points as much as possible without having it get too repetative. Another thing is clerification. What the hell is an Inky Commune? Why were those that got the mutated genes called Incubi and Succubi? Maybe you should have worked up the whole \'smells right\' aspect a little more. The idea is great but for all its importance it was just not given its due credit.
Oh, I\'m sorry. I seem to have went on rambling like I usually do. Please don\'t take my criticism too seriously. I only wish to make it clear that what could be worked on is only minor and that overall your work is totally amazing! I adore your writings and I hope to any higher power that is listening that you will soon put out something else I can drool over. Don\'t let Toshi and Mick fade into cyber space, work with them. Make them immortal. Thank you.
- Arundel
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That\'s not the end, is it?! I don\'t wanna see the end of Toshi and Mick! You could do another story with them...;)
Have you ever thought of trying to get published? This is an awesome story. I don\'t think you\'d have too much trouble getting someone to turn it into a book. It\'s wonderful, very well-written, the plot hooks you and pulls the reader through, the characters are very well-developed...
Anyway, getting a little off topic. I have to go back to my old standby: Wow! That was wonderful! Great chapter!
**Zeph**
Have you ever thought of trying to get published? This is an awesome story. I don\'t think you\'d have too much trouble getting someone to turn it into a book. It\'s wonderful, very well-written, the plot hooks you and pulls the reader through, the characters are very well-developed...
Anyway, getting a little off topic. I have to go back to my old standby: Wow! That was wonderful! Great chapter!
**Zeph**
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Is that it?
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello hello,
Well! Here we are, like 3 or 4 chapters from the end! Thanks for still reading...
Flamingolo... (sniff) it\'s my fault... (pout)... (cry) (sob) LOL Okay I\'ll take that blame. I can deal. ;-) I\'m delighted you liked it so much! The West?Drag Story has a title now! What the Wind Carries, and I\'m putting new chapters up about every day or so. I\'ll be posting it here on aff when Blur is fully up. Just rememeber, What the Wind is unedited. AKA please be kind! That and I\"m not sure it doesn\'t stink...
V... it isn\'t pathetic. I\'ve read this story like 4 times and I wrote the bloody thing. How awful is that! I wish the Commune was adopting people, I\'d be in line. If they\'ll take you, put in a good word for me too, okay??
Ash... it\'s not done yet. Hang in there, there\'s more over the next few days, but we\'re getting close to the end... I\'ve still a few tricks up my... well you get it. ;-) Thanks for reading!
Thanks again everyone...
Sarah
Well! Here we are, like 3 or 4 chapters from the end! Thanks for still reading...
Flamingolo... (sniff) it\'s my fault... (pout)... (cry) (sob) LOL Okay I\'ll take that blame. I can deal. ;-) I\'m delighted you liked it so much! The West?Drag Story has a title now! What the Wind Carries, and I\'m putting new chapters up about every day or so. I\'ll be posting it here on aff when Blur is fully up. Just rememeber, What the Wind is unedited. AKA please be kind! That and I\"m not sure it doesn\'t stink...
V... it isn\'t pathetic. I\'ve read this story like 4 times and I wrote the bloody thing. How awful is that! I wish the Commune was adopting people, I\'d be in line. If they\'ll take you, put in a good word for me too, okay??
Ash... it\'s not done yet. Hang in there, there\'s more over the next few days, but we\'re getting close to the end... I\'ve still a few tricks up my... well you get it. ;-) Thanks for reading!
Thanks again everyone...
Sarah
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love Mick\'s family! They\'re wonderful! Toshi really needed that time at the Commune, as did Mick. Another great chapter! Ack! We\'re getting so close to the end! I don\'t want this story to ever end!
Great job, though! ;)
**Zeph**
Great job, though! ;)
**Zeph**
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just want you to know that you have a wonderful story. And I love that update so often. I thought it was funny when Mick was chasing Toshi away with a table leg. Lol. That had me laughing. It was also funny when Toshi admitted that he thought about doing naughty stuff to Andy. :D I heart you. <3 <3
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*glomps Toshi half to death* YES! I\'m SO proud of him! He finally stood up to the Committee! He deserves many, many cookies! As do you! Wonderful update! *dances happily*
Sorry it\'s so short, but I can\'t get over how proud I am of Toshi!!
**Zeph**
Sorry it\'s so short, but I can\'t get over how proud I am of Toshi!!
**Zeph**
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!! That was SO cute and wonderful (and more than a little hot!)! I think this is my favorite chapter to date! Fluff and romance and danger and angst all rolled into one! Wonderful! Bye bye, crappy day! This just made everything all better!! Absolutely wonderful job!
**Zephyr**
**Zephyr**
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I was all set to just wait for you to post the rest here, but I just couldn\'t do it. I blame you *points*. Outstanding job with this lovely fic, I read the rest on your website in one sitting, and that rarely happens. I love where you took the plot, the unpredictability, and the development of your characters was just...freaking fantastic. I\'m not going in too much detail for the ones who\'ve yet to cheat, but I can easily say this was one of the best original fics I\'ve ever read! Looking forward to an update on the West/Drag fic, also an engrossing little ficcie!