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January 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Really you need paragraphs when writing dialogue... people weren't just making random things up when they decided that. The story is markedly rushed also, pacing is a big issue here, you should be more careful.
schedule
March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awesome....fantastic.