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schedule
March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
about the vote... could it be both...?
hehehh.. I\'ve been waiting for the next chapter for days.. i hope the next one\'s as great as the others.. ciao.
hehehh.. I\'ve been waiting for the next chapter for days.. i hope the next one\'s as great as the others.. ciao.
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Both...
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
brother, ur story is good byt write somethign with her brother
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Your grammar needs some work. As in the fact that you keep switching tenses, in the middle of sentences too. I do understand it\'s hard to concentrate on proper writing while writing something for AFF though. Otherwise it\'s very good so far. I think you should have Theodore take her virginity but be shocked when he realizes what he\'s done. Then Aleksei should think he\'s taking her virginity and be shocked that he hasn\'t. From there I have no idea where you should go. Good luck!
ciao
ciao
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the brother. there\'s just something about aleksei that i dont like... i dont trust him. anyway, update soon!
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THIS IS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO GOOD! Well done, I think you should carry on, choose either I don\'t mind, do ini mini minee mo if you have to! lol. Plz keep going.
schedule
March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THE NEW GUY!!!!!! >.<
schedule
March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooooooo...so who\'s going to take her virginity..her brother or this guy....(I\'m slightly leaning for the mysterious man...though I think I\'ll change my mind if he\'s just using her for his own gain...then I like the brother better.) oh...well...update soon.
schedule
March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Amazing.
schedule
March 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN!!! It stopped!? It got to the good part!!!!! PLEASE KEEP WRITING! DOn\'t stop! Don\'t stop! Shit!