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short, sweet, to the point
how old is ann?????? just wondering
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also update soon

This could have been a good story if you used paragraphs and detail. I\'m sorry, but I didn\'t enjoy it.

Yeah, that had like no detail. I bet it would be good if it were detailed!

No offence sweetie, but I\'m pretty sure you could do better than this. Add paragraphs, better detail, and some \"quotation marks\" for when someone is speaking. Also get more into the detail of character, it helps. Even if it\'s just erotica.

That was probably the shortest thing I\'ve ever seen. Actually, I\'ve seen shorter things, in which case you should feel pity upon thee. But I agree with Anon, when I say: \"Quotations, stupid! Like this!\" But don\'t take it personally. This was an overall okay story, you just need more detail, quotations, punctuation, etc. etc. Seriously, you\'re not going to get much anywhere if you keep writing like that. I liked the plot though. If only it had more... yuh know, the stuff that writers put in their works that make it good.