rate_review Reviews

Okay, first, Happy B-Day. I hope you had an enjoyable one.
Second, OH MY GODS! This story is really amazingly great! Excuse me for gushing like a fangirl, but I\'m seriously impressed. I\'m enjoying your writing style, as well as the plot itself. I can\'t wait for more. Well, I will look forward to it.

Happy Birthday!!!! So, how many years young are ya? I hope your day is great and inspires you. Keep up the wonderfull work on Ava! I eagerly await your next chapter.

HeLLo~! Happy Early Birthday *^^* weee~! thanks for writing another chapter even though you were busy as well as sick! =) I can\'t wait till the next chapter!! Byeee~!

Happy early birthday :3 keep on writing XD

slitted isn\'t a word, but scry is....so you\'re only half mad. *laughs* happy birthday for wednesday! this fics great, hope you update soon.

~skarrah.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY HAPPY BIRRRRTHHHHDDDAAAYYYYY! TO YOU!!! WE ALL LOVE YOU WE ALL LOVE YOU WE ALLLLLLL LOVE YOU!!! SO HURRY UP ANDDDD UPDATE!!! :) couldnt find anything to rhyme!!! But we still luv you

XOXOXO!!

Wonderful chapter! I missed reading your work! I love the way Ava finally woke up and smelled the proverbial coffee! I was getting so tired and upset about him and Mar. --sigh--

I do agree that a beta might be helpful to catch the small mistakes.

I run a group on behalf of Ayla called AFFBetaReaders on Yahoo, if you get in contact with me I\'ll send you an invite!

Apollo

Awesome chapter.

This review is going to be nonsensical since I\'m kinda, well, high at the moment. Again, I think the plot moved along just a little too fast for my liking. I wanted to learn more about Ava\'s wanderings down to find Kael and about the torture Kael went through to end up like that.

\"Slitted\" isn\'t a word, it\'s always \"slit\", and \"scry\" is a word, just a nonstandard one, so MS Word doesn\'t accept it.

CP the high

I\'m sorry to hear about your troubles...especially about your bunny. Have you tried offering it a carrot? Or are you speaking of a metaphorical rabbit, like a plot bunny? In that case, it certainly is homicidal at the moment, but that\'s right for the plot. I\'m sorry to see that Ava is having little luck with his rescue mission. Sounds like another violent rape is in the offing, perhaps a gang rape? Definitely it seems like the obvious actions for your villain and his cold-blooded hench-men. I agree with the people who say that the best aspect of the mage is his giggling. The hissy fits are also pretty chilling. I kind of want to see him die in some puny, pathetic way. Nothing really dramatic. Let the little creep snap his neck, tumbling back in terror of Kael.