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by Aphrael

person originalceenote
schedule September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I saw your review on I'm the Only One to Blame late in the game, so thank you. Now, on to my review of this lovely original of yours.

I'm two chapters in so far, and it's a beautifully written tale. Only a few typos, mainly missing words, but it flows well and the paragraphs are a good length. I'm a little worried about Ava after meeting Zarchast in chapter two. A little cat boy paired with a giant bat demon? Whodathunkit?
schedule November 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Someone was looking for this in the forum and I figured I would check it out... And then as I'm reading this voice in the back of my head kept saying "You've read this before..." Lo and behold - I have! I loved it back then and enjoyed it the second time around. The only comment I would make is that the formatting was a little off on the last chapter, making it a bit hard to read. I hope you do decide to keep working on it!
schedule August 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Damn.... Cliffhangers are horrible. I would really love to see what happens here. Please update. I loved the story.
schedule May 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
write more! its really good! pleeeeeeeeeeease... :)
person star101
schedule November 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. Please update before 2008. It would be very nice to finish this story before then. Let me know when you have updated ^_^!
person Yuki-Valons
schedule August 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh poor Ava! T.T Please update soon! I just have to find out what will happen to him.
person Sekre
schedule June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You must continue!
person Reepicheep-chan
schedule June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Get her a syringe. Squirting water in the holes worked a lot better at me than just squishing water around, and I got some food caught in my hole and my face swole up and it hurt alot, so... you know.
person Kiko
schedule June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm a big fan of this story. X3 i'm so happy you revived it. As for the wisdom tooth thing...fruit sorbet.
person gray
schedule June 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg write more! can't wait to read what happens next! very captivating story!