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for Please, Sir

by AcidTrip

schedule June 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sure it has a realy hot concept.
person JaceQuin
schedule June 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please continue.
person Qiana
schedule June 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please write more that was so hot
schedule June 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You should. Please.
schedule June 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was hot!
I am urging you to continue this! It would name a wonderful story.
schedule June 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is not bad but it could be so much better. Overall the writing is a bit rough and you use "the other" way too much. You really don't need it at all. Using the character's name is fine.
person moon
schedule February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*moans* more puleessssaaaaaaahhhhh
person Mewa
schedule January 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOO! YAOI!! Gotta love it! It was good! You should write more!!
person AcidTrip
schedule January 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yup, that was my first sex scene. ^^;;; I\'ve been told only I\'m intensely warped enough in the head to write something like that on my first time. <3 -Peace sign-

Thanks for all the comments and such, do keep drool and other bodily fluids to yourself. Unless you plan on screwing someone, in which case, you go right ahead.
person Mikke
schedule January 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was your First sex scene? Man, are you something. That was some intense reading!