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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Six
I love your style. You keep a level pace and yet seem to fill it to the brim. The sensual undertone without overt display is wonderful, so like real life. A rose, how beautiful. I can imagine the feel of its petals across my own skin. You give us time to imagine those things. Marissa, what a wonderful addition. Your witty banter between the two was amusing. I enjoyed it very much. It added more seasoning. Thanks. Off to chapter seven!
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I love your style. You keep a level pace and yet seem to fill it to the brim. The sensual undertone without overt display is wonderful, so like real life. A rose, how beautiful. I can imagine the feel of its petals across my own skin. You give us time to imagine those things. Marissa, what a wonderful addition. Your witty banter between the two was amusing. I enjoyed it very much. It added more seasoning. Thanks. Off to chapter seven!
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Seven
Ah. I wondered if Justin would get a bit worried. Poor guy, confused about what to wear. Been there. It\'s nice that we are seeing a regular haunt of Desimir\'s. We get a lot of background here. Justin grew up poor and had a relationship go bad two years earlier. He has trust issues that make him skiddish. Well, on to chapter eight. You know, I\'m going to need to go to be some time. LOL
Snowfall
Ah. I wondered if Justin would get a bit worried. Poor guy, confused about what to wear. Been there. It\'s nice that we are seeing a regular haunt of Desimir\'s. We get a lot of background here. Justin grew up poor and had a relationship go bad two years earlier. He has trust issues that make him skiddish. Well, on to chapter eight. You know, I\'m going to need to go to be some time. LOL
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey... awesome chapter!
I really wanted to deck Lucien in the face.... as for Matt, I\'m still debating :P Are you going to dig deeper into the HIV issue? I hope so, there\'s so many twists and turns in this story that it just really keeps the reader\'s attention... especially since very few stories found here deal with the more serious issues. This is just great! Can\'t wait till you update again!
kaiiz.
I really wanted to deck Lucien in the face.... as for Matt, I\'m still debating :P Are you going to dig deeper into the HIV issue? I hope so, there\'s so many twists and turns in this story that it just really keeps the reader\'s attention... especially since very few stories found here deal with the more serious issues. This is just great! Can\'t wait till you update again!
kaiiz.
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My review of Chapter 3:)
Apollo....as always a beautiful literary art work
chapter...even the sweetness and awkwardness over the
first date scenario.....and promises of a real, true
love to come between two amazing Gay Men....both down
to earth, full of intelligence (ok, I will use the
word we all know I love to say.......I love smart
men...I find that very sexy and these two men are
ultimate in sexy, sensual, erotic, sweet and yummy!)
And I like that you do a great parry/dance of words
and interaction...a touch, a look, a smile, a
tone.......very sizzle, pop, smooth, sensual, erotic,
funny, sweet and woofy sexy!
I could fall for either or both of our main
characters.......and you make that so yummy to
do......its in the beginning stages of ooh la la...I
can\'t wait to read more..they are complex, exciting
and real...now, beyond that I will be patient and wait
for more......
Your use of word, setting, time and place and eye
contact are lyrical and magical........lots of erotic
passion even in a hand touch...imagine if our hotties
actually do make love.......my Mac will have to be
warned...its Spring time and I don\'t want to overload
his new G5 IMAC circuits with such ooh la la woofy
yumminess....
Thanks Appollo..and hey I would have read your chapter
sooner but our area had a water main break and I
think it effected communications lines since I
couldn\'t get my DSL to work and..thankfully,it is
working now...but the water, well, don\'t drink it is
what we are told....the joys of Spring time messy
weather
as my friend Conner would say, your story made me
drool....that\'s a mild understatement!
Rainbow Hugs and Hershey Kisses and Rainbow Jelly
Beans to enjoy with your story:)
Michael
P.S. I sure hope everyone reads this amazing story....its one of the best I have read in a long long time:)
Apollo....as always a beautiful literary art work
chapter...even the sweetness and awkwardness over the
first date scenario.....and promises of a real, true
love to come between two amazing Gay Men....both down
to earth, full of intelligence (ok, I will use the
word we all know I love to say.......I love smart
men...I find that very sexy and these two men are
ultimate in sexy, sensual, erotic, sweet and yummy!)
And I like that you do a great parry/dance of words
and interaction...a touch, a look, a smile, a
tone.......very sizzle, pop, smooth, sensual, erotic,
funny, sweet and woofy sexy!
I could fall for either or both of our main
characters.......and you make that so yummy to
do......its in the beginning stages of ooh la la...I
can\'t wait to read more..they are complex, exciting
and real...now, beyond that I will be patient and wait
for more......
Your use of word, setting, time and place and eye
contact are lyrical and magical........lots of erotic
passion even in a hand touch...imagine if our hotties
actually do make love.......my Mac will have to be
warned...its Spring time and I don\'t want to overload
his new G5 IMAC circuits with such ooh la la woofy
yumminess....
Thanks Appollo..and hey I would have read your chapter
sooner but our area had a water main break and I
think it effected communications lines since I
couldn\'t get my DSL to work and..thankfully,it is
working now...but the water, well, don\'t drink it is
what we are told....the joys of Spring time messy
weather
as my friend Conner would say, your story made me
drool....that\'s a mild understatement!
Rainbow Hugs and Hershey Kisses and Rainbow Jelly
Beans to enjoy with your story:)
Michael
P.S. I sure hope everyone reads this amazing story....its one of the best I have read in a long long time:)
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh they have to leave? A wonderful story so far. I\'m looking forward to reading the next chapter.
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! A new chapter! And it\'s so cute! But I think the tension is killing me as much as it\'s killing them... Please update soon!
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aww... their first kiss! But you kept it PG13 :(
More please *offers your muse the slaveboy of her choice if she hurries another chapter out of you*
-kaiiz-
More please *offers your muse the slaveboy of her choice if she hurries another chapter out of you*
-kaiiz-
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March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey buddy, just read your story. I\'m loving the character development and the build up in angst :D You can totally feel the different personalities of the characters coming through with the different POVs...
*gently nudges you in the ribs* so when you gonna update? Adoring reader here awaits... patiently... for now *grin*
*gently nudges you in the ribs* so when you gonna update? Adoring reader here awaits... patiently... for now *grin*
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March 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOAH!!!
Talk about WEIRD!!
umm... I\'m sorry about your ankle... but...
I\'M GLAD YOU\'RE NOT GOING!!!
(we likes you all nice and safe and happy and writingful right where you are)
*nods*
*anxiously awaits more of your story*
Talk about WEIRD!!
umm... I\'m sorry about your ankle... but...
I\'M GLAD YOU\'RE NOT GOING!!!
(we likes you all nice and safe and happy and writingful right where you are)
*nods*
*anxiously awaits more of your story*
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March 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I know more than just ONE person\'s on top, I was asking WHO was going to top 1ST! Anyways, chap 11 RULED! Is it leading to something?! WOOHOO! I hope, Byes