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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 12
So sweet and I like that the tension between them has left and we were able to enjoy more witty banter. Does the bogeyman await outside? Please say it isn\'t so! My heart is thudding in my throat as Justin stands at the door preparing to face who knows what.
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So sweet and I like that the tension between them has left and we were able to enjoy more witty banter. Does the bogeyman await outside? Please say it isn\'t so! My heart is thudding in my throat as Justin stands at the door preparing to face who knows what.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 13
Whew! Had me scared there for a minute. Thought Justin was in for it. His writing is very angsty and I look forward to seeing more of it.
You asked for advice if something was technically incorrect. If Justin\'s character, Josh, tried to commit suicide by slicing his wrists vertically, chances are that he would not even come close to killing himself, although he may cause some nerve damage that would affect the feeling in his hands. The cut would need to be in a major vein further up on the arm in order to get the quick results there appear to be in Justin\'s story. It would take hours of bleeding from the wrists for a person to get near death and then the wounds may need to be re-opened to keep them bleeding. Thought you deserved to know. I\'ve never corrected another author about it, but you asked.
Love the story and anxiously await an update.
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Whew! Had me scared there for a minute. Thought Justin was in for it. His writing is very angsty and I look forward to seeing more of it.
You asked for advice if something was technically incorrect. If Justin\'s character, Josh, tried to commit suicide by slicing his wrists vertically, chances are that he would not even come close to killing himself, although he may cause some nerve damage that would affect the feeling in his hands. The cut would need to be in a major vein further up on the arm in order to get the quick results there appear to be in Justin\'s story. It would take hours of bleeding from the wrists for a person to get near death and then the wounds may need to be re-opened to keep them bleeding. Thought you deserved to know. I\'ve never corrected another author about it, but you asked.
Love the story and anxiously await an update.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oops, I meant horizontally, not vertically. It\'s after 3:00 am here and I\'m not quite with it. I just couldn\'t stop reading your story, dammit! *grins* I might sneak a peak at more of your writing before I go to be.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eep! You can\'t just leave it there!! Who\'s that guy following Justin? What\'s he want? What\'s going to happen with Desimir? You can\'t leave me here!!
Okie. I\'m done. Sorry about that. You\'re not the only one with out-of-control muses! ;)
Anyway, I really love this story. I just sat and read all 13/14 chapters in one sitting and.....wow. Absolutely wonderful. Then again, most things by you are! ;) Very nice! I\'ll DEFINITELY be watching for the next update!!
**Zeph**
Okie. I\'m done. Sorry about that. You\'re not the only one with out-of-control muses! ;)
Anyway, I really love this story. I just sat and read all 13/14 chapters in one sitting and.....wow. Absolutely wonderful. Then again, most things by you are! ;) Very nice! I\'ll DEFINITELY be watching for the next update!!
**Zeph**
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooh... I wonder who the stalker person is... And you should write a seperate story for that little bit you put in here. It sounds really interesting and really good... I know I\'d really like to read it. ^_^
Please update soon!
Please update soon!
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter One
You have kept your character personalities distinct and individual. Very nice. The flow is casual and even paced, not rushed. Personally, I am into action fics. You do this style so well that I want to keep reading. Your characters seem so real. You take your time describing their physical and emotional attributes, giving us a glimpse into their inner selves. The description of a hesitant first meeting seems so real to life. I like that you have made Justin a writer, and of yaoi at that! Cool.
I\'m off to read the next chapter.
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You have kept your character personalities distinct and individual. Very nice. The flow is casual and even paced, not rushed. Personally, I am into action fics. You do this style so well that I want to keep reading. Your characters seem so real. You take your time describing their physical and emotional attributes, giving us a glimpse into their inner selves. The description of a hesitant first meeting seems so real to life. I like that you have made Justin a writer, and of yaoi at that! Cool.
I\'m off to read the next chapter.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Two
I\'m smiling. Desimir seems to have liked what he read. What a shock for Justin. As with the first chapter, very well written. I\'m off to read chapter three.
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I\'m smiling. Desimir seems to have liked what he read. What a shock for Justin. As with the first chapter, very well written. I\'m off to read chapter three.
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Three
Again, you have left me smiling at the end of the chapter. You gave us just enough information about the lives of the characters without boring. At the same time, you are able to give us the impression of the passage of simply time instead of telling us that time passed. I was very impressed by that. Desimir\'s invitation was very smooth. He would buy dinner due to running out on Justin unless there was someone else waiting in the wings. Very smooth. On to the next chapter!
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Again, you have left me smiling at the end of the chapter. You gave us just enough information about the lives of the characters without boring. At the same time, you are able to give us the impression of the passage of simply time instead of telling us that time passed. I was very impressed by that. Desimir\'s invitation was very smooth. He would buy dinner due to running out on Justin unless there was someone else waiting in the wings. Very smooth. On to the next chapter!
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Four
Isn\'t Justin just full of surprises?! That chapter had me grinning from ear to ear. Such a mischievous blue-eyed imp. This will be an interesting pair. I do think the lines between their styles of speech blurred a bit in this chapter. I love how this story is going. Can\'t wait to read more. On to chapter five!
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Isn\'t Justin just full of surprises?! That chapter had me grinning from ear to ear. Such a mischievous blue-eyed imp. This will be an interesting pair. I do think the lines between their styles of speech blurred a bit in this chapter. I love how this story is going. Can\'t wait to read more. On to chapter five!
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Five
Wow. We are going to get a story within a story. How wonderful! I\'m glad Justin\'s muse is back. Horror of horrors, the never satisfied clients. I hope he doesn\'t lose them. Ah, but Justin might just be worth it. As always, well written. And, as you can see by my comments, you have completely drawn me into the story. On to chpater six!
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Wow. We are going to get a story within a story. How wonderful! I\'m glad Justin\'s muse is back. Horror of horrors, the never satisfied clients. I hope he doesn\'t lose them. Ah, but Justin might just be worth it. As always, well written. And, as you can see by my comments, you have completely drawn me into the story. On to chpater six!
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