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for Luke ~N~ Brandi's Fantasy

by xAngelicRosex

person Anonymous
schedule December 29, 2016 at 12:00 AM

You can tell it was done in 5 minutes it's more like the start of a good idea than a actual story. It's a good idea but it needs filling out slooooooowing downing and think about the words describe describe describe! the words should grip you and make you feel something, make you tingle.