schedule
May 18, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I really wish you would continue this story.
schedule
September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My only problem with the story is that it seemed very mechanical. There was too much description of how the sex happened and not enough emotion. Try putting in some elements of how the girl really felt or describe the orgasm itself instead of just \"came badly.\" That\'s a little vague. Of course, it\'s completely up to you and these are just suggestions :D
schedule
June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what the hell??? u havent updated !! UPDATE!! its realllllyyyyy good :P plzz continue..dont let this story go
schedule
January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is really good! I like it a lot. Please update soon, and when you do can you please email me? I really do like this and would like to be able to keep track of it.
Thanks
Meep
evilhamster213@earthlink.net
Thanks
Meep
evilhamster213@earthlink.net
schedule
December 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The story line was good. You had a good amount of errors in spelling, punctuation, and grammar.
The summary was poor. Rape is intense. To say that one is \'intensely raped\' sounds redundant and - well, for lack of a better word - dumb.
Keep working at it. Get a good beta.
daisymae
The summary was poor. Rape is intense. To say that one is \'intensely raped\' sounds redundant and - well, for lack of a better word - dumb.
Keep working at it. Get a good beta.
daisymae
schedule
December 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hott...
schedule
December 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow, that was intense. what else can they possibly do to her... guess we\'ll find out next chapter. keep it up.