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i say make her pregnant,

This is rely good, u should definaltly continue this.

Not bad! Here\'s a note though.
The knot is not there to make sure a dogs bitch gets pregnant. Its there to make sure she doesn\'t run off afterwards and get mated by ANOTHER dog and wash his sperm out. Its a dogs way of ensuring that its his offspring he\'ll be feeding.

just go with whatever helps you write faster

I dunno..I like the Story and It would be funny as hell to see the son/Daughter walk in on them..Lmao Its funny just thinking about it..but I still Respect your action anyway! I love this story and I think there need to be more Beast Stories..there arn\'t many on here...and Yea Go with the daddy Smoke-um idea!

update soon

do you think you could update soon?

I love the story and I hope you continue soon! One thing though, since they had sex multiple times without using any protection whatsoever while she was in heat, wouldn\'t that mean she\'d get pregnant?

Excellent story. Your research payed off very well. Keep up the good work.

I am still trying to decide if you were being sarcastic with your comment to me in the first chapter...oh well ;)

You fixed the mistakes and the story flows quite well now. Especially the sentence: \"She shuddered when the hot burst of semen struck her the inner walls of her vagina like a fireman’s hose, quenching the burning fires of lust.\" Very nice worldplay there *bg* You could start writting for those little Marquette pocket books, you familiar with them? Bottom plot in those books: descibe the act of having sex using as many metaphores as you can...and I have read enough high-rated stories to know that there are a lot of those metaphores! :)

Anyway, good fix of the first chapter and a second chapter that does not need that fix. Well done!

Anita