rate_review Reviews

you fucking suck

you fucking suck as a writer. First you characterzation is pathetic at least make them fucking real. I am sure that some \"hott girl\" would let some \"fat ass\" eat her out. that would never happen even for however much moeny he gave her. On top of that your rating is off there has not been one sex scene. There was some third base action and that would give you and an R rating and i just finished reading your other stories and i have to say that you have just became a worse and worse writer. you have not improved at all. Take this advice to heart and stop embarssing yourself and just give up writing ok. At least give up wrting anything that you consider \"NC-17\". Just never write again ok.

ok, great chappie dude.

The next chapter should take some sort of twist I think, like maybe the Hal, Ariel, Jamie, and Jamie\'s mom (who we haven\'t met yet but that could end real quick) getting it on.

Spanking fetishes forever!!!

is Bentlyville a real place? i got to go there sometime soon

this story blows its not nc-17 its maybe maybe pg-13 wow you say pussy like 14 times a chapter big fucking deal

You\'re nutty! ^_^

I like this story, you\'re verrrrryyy good at writing sex scenes. It\'s like you have this hentai gift lol
Keep going :)

As usual, great chapters!

Ummmm... I know I shouldnt rush you, but could you please stop leaving us these Cliffhangers? Chappy 5 was like dropping off the edge of the Grand Canyon (and I bungied it once so I know).

And for the sake of all thats good (no matter your definition of it), either get Roy to drop some weight or kill him from the story (actually, that doesn;t sound like a bad idea, Roy gets hit by a Metro-Bus and does more damage to the bus than the bus does to him).

*Shakes head, laughing* The mother and son conversation was sick, but very hilarious in that last chapter. Overall great story. It\'s a guilty pleasure to read.