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May 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
MORE MORE MORE! Are you kidding me??? COME ON! I\'ve been waiting to read this for so long and you give me TWO CHAPTERS?! Speed it up woman!
Hehe, well, i didn\'t know you were such a good writer. Well done, ol\' chap, well done. Keep up the good work, trying hard not to picture my govt. teacher as the professor *Tries and gives up to a full fledged fantasy* oh whoops! So..Am..Am i still here?...this is better off continued...somewhere else *grin*
haha, no but seriously, keep up the great work, wine growin\' ain\'t got nothin\' on this!
Hehe, well, i didn\'t know you were such a good writer. Well done, ol\' chap, well done. Keep up the good work, trying hard not to picture my govt. teacher as the professor *Tries and gives up to a full fledged fantasy* oh whoops! So..Am..Am i still here?...this is better off continued...somewhere else *grin*
haha, no but seriously, keep up the great work, wine growin\' ain\'t got nothin\' on this!
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May 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is a good start. NOW YOU WRITE MORE AND YOU SHOW FANFICTION.NET WHAT ADULTFANFICTION IS MADE OF!
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May 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This story is very good. I really like how you are building things up slowly. It makes everything better that way. I am looking forward to reading more. Please continue, and post ASAP!!!
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May 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was amazing! Where did you get such an amazing idea? You must have some pretty creative friend(s). Maybe you should buy her/them lunch some day! I hope the rest, especially the kissing part, isnt long and boring. Im not a fan of ice, keep that in mind. Make sure the verbs are all in the same tense! Is this a harry potter porn site?
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ooooooooh, I like how you\'re building it up instead of just having them jump into the sack right away, like some of these other trashy, hastily thrown-together adult fics. I don\'t know about anyone else but I think this is one of the most intriguing, well-written pieces of literature I have ever beheld. I feel somewhat like the professor now, with a warm feeling in my groin and desperately wanting MORE....MORE!!!!!!! For the sake of the your readers you must post that next chapter... AND FAST!
Keep up the good work Fiji Water!
P.S. I can\'t help but think that your writing is as smooth and clear and powerful as your name.
Keep up the good work Fiji Water!
P.S. I can\'t help but think that your writing is as smooth and clear and powerful as your name.
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May 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Damn, chicken bones is right. You\'ve got some potential to be a great porn writer, or should i say adult fiction engineer. So let\'s get this ball rolling, or should I say balls rolling? I hope you dictate the sex as well as the build-up or else it will be very anticlimactic and leave everyone dissatisfied. I can\'t wait for more!