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for School Rules

by eighthweasley

person Kirstin
schedule November 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
What a hot story, please update soon.
person me
schedule November 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
good so far but try adding action inbetween the dialog
person me
schedule November 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i take back what i said about adding actions i like it this way
person MoP
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think it's brave to just write in dialogue - you have to be very careful with your words. But I love that concept, challenges the imagination. As for the story itself. Poor girl, she seems so clever and yet has to learn so much. *s* Ho* Hope you let the teachers give her some lessons she won't forget!!
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! Very interesting story...^_^
person Gilrean
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow great story! I love it keep writing!
person gigi
schedule November 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This story would be a lot better if you actually added some descriptions. All you have is dialogue, and while it's good, readers neede toe to go on. Like what the characters look like, scenary so oso on. This not meant to be a flame, just really wanting more to the plot.
person pls
schedule November 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh yes...hurry with another update...cant wait to the time when all of the teachers take her at the same time...