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As long as he says over 15, you\'re golden. ^-^ Truthfully, though, Jason is your brainchild. Do what you think is right. If you want him to be seventeen, then great. If you think he\'d be better as a 20-year-old who looks 17, that\'s great too! That\'s the beauty of fiction. ^-^ It\'s all in what YOU, the WRITER, want to do. It\'s good to get opinions, but bear in mind that you won\'t please everyone. (I learned that one the hard way.) Keep writin\' and update soon!

You had a scene where Jason was at school. I suppose you could say it was college, but it seemed more like highschool to me. I\'ld stick to the 16-17 age range. You might want to put a underage warning on it, but I think a lot of people on this web-site won\'t really care. This is a freat story and I look forward to reading more of it.

1. I say that Jason should be 17 yrs old, right on the border line of a minor but an adult at the same time.

2. Gabriel should be 26 he's not tooooo old and not to young. An age you can have a fantasy about and know you can actually touch your fantasy...or ar.
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3. Your right having another chapter at ol Gabe's house would be dragging a bit much. I would like to see Jason know how beautiful (as 'Gabe' says) he is. For me to find out how Gabe portrays his paintings.


That's all you asked.

PS.: Keep up to go work!

He should definetely be 18-20 years old... it wouldnt really work (at least for me) if Jason was younger than that.
Gabriel should be 30... that's a good age.

I like your story, keep up the good work!

I really like this story. I also have some suggestions, or just my personal opinions, on what you requested help on in your writings. First, I think you should keep Jason's age at around 16-17 because, based on how it reads in storstory, it seems as if he is just a kid in high school. Also he has attiattitude and mentality of a litt6 ye6 year old brat. He seems to try to hide his emotions, unsuccessfully, from others as the young tend to do not having learned to cover his emotions well. If you change him now it might just throw off his character completely. Second, Gabriel's age should be at least 30. He has to be, at least, at an age where he is making enough money to afford Jason's services and have the money handy. That is unless you make his character a rich kid still living off his parents or an inheritance child living off money from dead parents, grandparents, etc. That way you could make him younger without making it unbelievable. Third, I think the sketch scene should be at Gabriel's house so it could lead to some extra fun that they would have to stf thf they go elsewhere. In addition for the future, I think that a relationship should form, they try to keep it secret due to age, the father finds out, the blackmail begins, they try to get away from it all, and any other chaotic thngs that could possibly happen. I hope this input helps you some and I can't wait to read more of this fic.

16-17

"I am sticking to 16-17, my friend say 17-18, and my other friend says he should be 18-19, because if he’s younger then 18 ,then that’s illegal,"
Well him being underage will be more logical, because He is in school and he is being forced. So It´ll made more sense if he is under 18. About illegal, being prostitued for some time now even being 18 or 19 will still make it illegal. And in many countries legal age for sex is 16, not 18. So... I´m for the 16-17...

"Gabriel 26-28 or older"
To me around late 20ies or early thirties is OK. Not older... Enought for him to be indebendent and grown up but not much more. I´ll say... around 26 and 33. 26-28 is nice that gives him around 10 years more wich ider der but not older without getting too older and in the realm of lolita complex...

About when to do the sketch. ^^; I don´t know. Maybe he should it inmediatly. Or just leave it for a lot later in the future, leave it as something pending and use it a dramatic point sometime (depending on what are your plans... If Jason is planning to avoid Gabriel, Gabriel can use that as an excuse. Or if things gets complicated Jason can use it as a peace offer... I don´t know... IMO get done with it or keep it for a lot later with dramatic purposes. XDDDD I don´t know. I was always a BAD at planning stories, I´m not good at offering plots.

I think that Jason should be 16-17ish (leaning more toward 17) because he's still in high school right? I mean if he's still in hschoschool he could be 18 if you wanted, but I'm sure since he's a hustler it doesn't really matter if he's a minor because what he's doing is illegal anyway. As for Gal I l I think 26-28ish would be perfect. Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter!! Seriously, this is such a great story, I love it!

Wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I likey this stoery Wootness!

i love thiss tory! its so good! i hope u update soon because im anxious for more!!