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for School Bus Blues

by Liz422

person Tay
schedule October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I say Johnny should keep her for himself.
person Anon
schedule October 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
very good story. I think ge should set her free.
person naughty
schedule October 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow..so hot! more please..just break her!!
person xellos & filia
schedule October 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Killer story! It's my favorite of all these others. And I hope Johnny cheats his friends and keeps the girl for himself. Make her his sex slave please!!!!!! PLEASE?!!!
person Laura
schedule October 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting story and I think that Johnny should take her for himself. The other guys would do it if they were in his place.
person LucKyo (not logged in)
schedule October 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*Small suggestion, ie. begging) Johnny should betray his friends for some nookie and keep Elisa for himself! THEN she needs to betray his ass and find a way to make them all pay!!!! *Shakes fist* Kickass story.
person Charlotte
schedule October 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is super. I think you should definately write it so that he helps her escape and she becomes his. Mybe they even fall in love. I know, I know a bit too romantic. But it could be good.
You're really good a describing the sex scenes!!
person DisappearedCat
schedule October 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OoI liI like this addition, more than the others, in fact. I think Johnny should blow off his pals and try to keep Elisa for himself... no pun intended ;-) But the other way could still be interesting. Surprise me! I'm still readin!
person Anon
schedule October 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
break her ;)
person Gloria Gainer
schedule October 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Strangely enough I really like this! I'm all hot and bothered. ^^