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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
damn! nice.
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September 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
nice first chapter, really hot and fun
only small thing i would remove some of the prestory, so that you see them, then fall inlove with them as people
also forplay, just adding something towards the strip, it felt slighly boring
even adding something as simple as her dipping down on him, running her back along him before bending over and calling over her sholder "fuck me"
just something, but great story, looking forward to the next chapter
only small thing i would remove some of the prestory, so that you see them, then fall inlove with them as people
also forplay, just adding something towards the strip, it felt slighly boring
even adding something as simple as her dipping down on him, running her back along him before bending over and calling over her sholder "fuck me"
just something, but great story, looking forward to the next chapter
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August 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is awesome! Keep up the great work!
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March 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow - that was ... amazing. Very nicely done my friend, although I am wondering just what the price is going to be.
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good Story
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January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, yes! That was unbelievably hot and sexy. I love an older woman/younger man fanfic because you hardly ever see them. There are so few in number. You definitely write some spicy love scenes! WOW!
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January 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is such an awesome story! If it weren\'t for this story, I would have never known arse was a word. Good job, Sensei.
--Tililia<< slow on these types of things. :P
--Tililia<< slow on these types of things. :P
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September 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
please update as soon as possible,can't wait for more
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August 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ah, sounds like a one shot. tell me there will be more??? *pleads and begs*
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August 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Its sad that Rudy had a girlfriend named Trudy.....I think he made her up. Everything else in the story is great. I just love the kitchen scene.