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just wanted to let you know i LOVE your story!!!! i love the fact its a biracial one as well....anyways sean sounds supa sexy...;-)anyways hope u update soon...and if u get the chance i have a few on fictionpress....my name is fivedollarshake...ill check out your stuff on there if i can find youru name....laters xx

Me again! ^_^ Well, I loved this chapter! The dialogue was witty and worked real well. LIke I said before you've definitely got some talent.

Ok here is my critique, and something I got in trouble for with my writing group. Watch your tags. He siad, she said ect. You had quite a few of them. From what I read in how to write romance fiction. You should only have tons of tags if there are more than just the heroe and heroine talking other than that loved chapter six.

This story is getting really good.....UPDATE SOON...also, I hope you get alot more reviews but, don't get disappointed if you don't. I write in the anime section in this site, and I can tell you...you'll get alot of hits but not that many reviews....I don't knoy buy but that's the way it is.....Remember, keep writing...is not the quantity of readers you get, but the quality of their reviews....(I know it sounds corny, but it true!!!!)

This is so good......I just started reading your story today.....I finish all seven chapters, and I'm hooked.....I need more!!!!!!!!....I think sex scenes are great, but without a great story to go with them...thier nothing.......keep up the great job, and please tell that there is more......UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!

Oh my god! I just love this story.... I haven't had the time to send a reply, but here is one now. The story is not only entertaining, but also realisic. The two white guys at the black house party? I've been in situations like that. You really have a niche for painting a scene, without going overboard descriptively.

It just reads so well that I have to check for new chapters all the time.You can't go wrong when your characters have a well developed history. I find myself wondering...'Which part do I like the most...flashbacks or present time?' The jury is still out on that one.

I do believe that you have some idea of where you will take this next and I will definitely be waiting!

Ellie 'Doll'

This is a pretty good story.
I could take it or leave it as far as the smut's concerned though.
Then again if there wasn't going to be smut eventualy I don't think that you'd have posted it here. ^_^
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

You're a pretty good writer. Your story flows and is quite entertaining. However, if you're looking for genuine feedback, you wont get it here. Thats just being honest. Most who visit this site ae looking for the smut ya know. Anyhow, I too am an interracial romance writer. I don't know if you're affiliated with any writing comminuties but you may want to joi some. I am currently a memebr f two. One is general romance writing community and the other is specifically targeting the black woman who write about IR relationships. If you're intersted in getting the links, email me at above address'm a'm at work now and don't have the time nescessary to actually pull up the links. As I said before the story is good and well written. I look forward to reading more in the future.