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Um. Wow. Yeah. There might be a story here, if you could pick it out of the grammer and spelling issues. You really really (and I mean) Really, need to work on those, or find an editor that can help you with that... Also, I noticed there wasnt much description... All we had was a little bit of what was going on in her mind at the very beginning... (note the little) and thats it. The rest of it seems to be dialoge only, and its hard to tell where the dialoge ends and begins. First, get someone to edit over this, clean it up... and then you might want to work on your description. Im not flaming, just giving constructive criticism. Good luck, hope it works out!
Much luv,
Natakamani

What the shit is this?

K ... I think you need to just do a spell check and stuff ...

It\'s difficult to follow this fic. You really need to find a beta reader or run the text through a spellcheck.