rate_review Reviews

I would have liked to have read this story and given it a fair review, but I was unable to read it, because you don't have a clue what a paragraph is.

Try fixing up the story, skipping a line between paragraphs to start with. Make sure to only have one person talking in a paragraph at a time.

It\'s not bad. I do like the style of your writing which takes your mind away from reality and gets lost somewhere in...well, somewhere! lol. You need to paragrapgh - if you look away and look back, you don\'t have a clue where you were. That would make getting through your work a lot easier. It was a worthwhile read! *big kiss*