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July 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hon, I\'m sorry, but your story isn\'t that good. It isn\'t that the writing itself is bad....really....it\'s just way too nostalgic and filmy, too superficial, and we don\'t really like either character. Sorry. I see potential, you should try again.
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July 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Um, doesn\'t quite work that way. And if you\'re going to write smut, you need to learn how to say penis. Unless that was on purpose to be funny. Overall, not horrible. But could be better.