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for Roman Enslavement

by Scribe

person KayLost
schedule April 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Lovely. You must write more. The story line is incredibly intriguing.
person Geri
schedule March 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Scribe,
I am glad to get to read this story here as well. I had started it on your web site, but had a hard time opening each page. I look forward to following the storyline once again.
I always enjoy reading how you mix intrigue and humor within your stories!

Nothing quite like getting to end the day by reading a story from another good ole fashioned southern bell! Thanks!

Geri
person me
schedule March 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
this is really good...i really like the way your plot moves...and also you have a good way of showing what ur characters are like rather than telling the readers directly!...it\'s very decriptive...nice! please update!! or create a sequel!
person Anon
schedule March 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Do Continue...

good story..
person Kat
schedule February 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Extremely impressive. The writing style is fluid and keeps the reader interested. The characters are believable and very well thought out. They make themselves known and you can't help but picture them perfectly in your mind. Your knowledge of Roman history and the Roman Gods and Goddesses is also impressive. It's all perfectly thought out and the way you portray the Gods and Goddesses is perfect. you capture their spirit perfectly. Bravo!!!!
person Me
schedule January 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oh mi gosh! U *HAVE* to update really soon, ok? I am DIEING to find out what happens! Not to rush u or anything, but QUICKLY! lol I luv ur work, pleaz continue! :)
person Lynn
schedule January 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That was brilliant and amazing and everything I will never be able to write. *L* And I love the Gods and Goddesses, excellent characterization. And poor Mozelle. Heh. Really. I feel bad for her. *Nods like she believes herself* Hmmmmhmmm. I really don't have anything constructive to say, just lots and lots of praise. But praise is generally good. *Praise praise praise*
person Em
schedule January 16, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I went to your website and read the whole story in two days, and let me just say: WOW!

It was good, I loved it and it made me feel all happy and fluffy inside. :D
person Josephine
schedule December 31, 2002 at 12:00 AM
Love the idea for this story, and it's looking really interesting. I hope you update soon.
person Fiona Rayne
schedule December 19, 2002 at 12:00 AM
I feel extreme sympathy toward Mozelle, poor thing, having Discordia on her back and then Lupus...I'd crack up and develop an illness to hide away from it.
However, while I'm at it I can't seem to become cross with Lupus. Normally I would but the way you've written the character I just couldn't ever be really pissed off at him. That is extremely clever and shows your obvious talent with characterisation. Lupus little brother (the middle one, whose name I can't remember at the moment) is very sweet, just wishing my brother was more like that, ah well a girl can't have everything.

I am hoping that Mozelle is going to get cut some slack soon, however Lupus' plan seems quite foolproof (unless she gets her significant monthly event which would be most awkward for everyone but he'd get nowhere...)
They would be very sweet together, wonder how well it would go down with everyone, not least with his parents. And she seems to want none of it at the moment. He doesn't know when to stop and how to judge her feelings either, which he needs to do.

How good is Mozelle's grip on the language by this point of the story (chapter 14)? I know Lupus seems to be more of a man of actions rather than words but Mozelle seemed to have a better grip on Latin in Chapter 13. I am itching for more of this. The research and everything has been done so well (ever thought of publishing?)

And finally, the fangirly bit. I LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!! EVERYTHING IS WRITTEN SO WELL! WOWOWOWOW!!!!!

That is all...:D