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for Torments Of Hell

by HaldirsSlaveGirl

person thePD1
schedule March 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
>.> longer chapters and less A/N's, condense em into one!

But ya, LONGER CHAPTERS... Also hint at age, because no matter how you swing it, 8yrs or w/e is WAAAAAAAAAAY to young to be having sex with...... notice the capitols.
schedule January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Three chapters of 'Sorry I can't write, but here's my excuse.' What a pitiful way to try to keep your story towards the top of the lists without actually having to give the readers anything new.

person Anon
schedule January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
3 "Chapters" of "I'm sorry" is pointless and stupid and it looks like it's just a way to keep your story up "higher." This isn't a your taxes, you can take as long as you need to write another chapter. Even if you abandon the story, it's not the end of the world.
person jess
schedule December 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE only put on new chaps if your going to update! If you want to say sorry use ONE chapter and keep revising it! It's very frustrating to be pushing hte next button and getting nothing three times in a row!
person Anon
schedule November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you do know that that's the third AN right? don't worry about updating if you really don't have time, but for heaven's sake stop the notes!
person The Haunted Mizu
schedule November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think you should makeit as bloody, torturous and cruel as possible. I do not believe in that stuff honestly and I think all perpetrators of this henious crime called rape should slaughtered visciously, but it is indeed interesting to read (and it satiates my sadistic side...) heheh. Well til you update!
person barg
schedule May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
barg
person make
schedule December 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
make it very brutal and the dicks huge.
person Patricia16
schedule November 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
pleae update I want more
person sayaka
schedule September 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
make her Dad a doctor so he can rape her on a medical bunk and with some medical tool