rate_review Reviews

I like the story but it keeps skipping around are there some parts missing? I went from meeting the Irish artist to waking up to go to meet Xavier. Then from talking of Dante's memories and all of a sudden she's going to Xavier's place, then a jump to her finding her brother I don't know whats going on anymore.
Ps. sorry if this is posted multiple times My laptop is being weird.

This story started out promising, but quickly lost me. The story jumps around, skipping through time without any sense of direction or fluid continuation. Chracters seem to change mid-page, and I still don't understand the power structure between vampires and humans, not to mention vampires and other vampires. Who is Hunter? Is he important? Why do we meet him and why is he at the dinner with Dante and Xavier? What is Alex's conection emotionally to Eva? If you clean the story up, it would be an interesting to read. Also, there's some grammar problems where you prob put punctuation or mistakenly typed that interupts the flow of the story with type inserts.

i liked the backlight it was at but . . . i think you need work on keeping on one track and not skiping events that are important to the story i found it vary chopy and chould not under stand the story line well

I freaking love this story.:3... I have an ongoing crush on Damien and I can\'t wait to see what happens next! Keep up the awesome work.

i enjoyed self, keep writing and check ur spelling. i look forward to the rest of self

Amazing. I really love this story, and I seriously shoudl express my many thanks. The world that you have come up with in this original is amazing... What is an even better word than amazing? Fantastic. Fantabulous. Wonderful... De-Lovely (I\'m a Cole Porter fan) sounds good as well.

I really can\'t wait for the next installment of this fic, and if you need any help with anything involving writing, please give me a shout at wl_gael@hotmail.com . I\'d be glad and truly honoured to help. And I love all the different perspectives and parts to it... yet I wish to hear more about Eva. I have somehow become very attached to her. I am now a devoted Cyrus/Eva shipper, as well as Jamie/tatoo guy (can\'t remember his name at the moment... and Dante/Damien. Damien/Eva is cool too, but it just doesn\'t ring true to me at the moment.

I hope to read more of this story as well as hear from you.

Til then,
Meaghan

I have two reasons behind this second review.

One, I said Jamie instead of Jessie, *blushes* woops.

Two, you deserve a lot of reviews... msut go recruit more people to read and review every single chapter, and I shall do that as well... :)

This vamp world is amazing. :)

Kage,
I have just read through part 1 of Self. I have to say I am hooked.
Normally I see these kinds of fics as a way to kill a bit of time. However,
I have been drawn in by your story. You have created a world and characters that ring true(as true as vampire stories can!)
I can\'t wait to finish what you have posted so far, and hope that more will be up soon.
Thanks for a fun afternoon of reading,
Kirst

Been really enoying this story...basically read it all in one day. I like the change of character focus (didn\'t think I would because I was really into the Eva/Dante pairing, found Dante\'s character to be very compelling, albeit deeply intimidating) And I think the Jessie chapters will be great reading as well...relate to mouthy characters, lol. Thanks for the enjoyable read, and I hope you get more chapters out soon!

Been really enoying this story...basically read it all in one day. I like the change of character focus (didn\'t think I would because I was really into the Eva/Dante pairing, found Dante\'s character to be very compelling, albeit deeply intimidating) And I think the Jessie chapters will be great reading as well...relate to mouthy characters, lol. Thanks for the enjoyable read, and I hope you get more chapters out soon!