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November 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This really needs correct grammar.
Good so far though.
Keep it up. xxx
Good so far though.
Keep it up. xxx
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh! I liiiike! Very interesting! *nods* I love new takes on the divine, and I'd love to see where this goes...
That said, AFF likes to do this thing where it'll randomly chew up and spit words out. It's happen to a bunch of my fics. So, here's a coupel of places it's happened:
It merely meant a change. A change, a change too heavy for the angel’s light aura todle,dle, [I'm guessin this was 'to handle']
Asast ast attempt to get close to the angels they resorted to the only option left. War. [A last attempt?]
I think there was one more, but I can't seem to find it. >.<
Also, it seems like English isn't your first language, please forgive me if that's totally wrong, but if you'd like me to edit some of the grammar and stuff I'd be happy to. Don't get me wrong, though, it's not too bad, I'm just a perfectionist with my own fics so I assume that others are too.
Oh, and not speaking a word of Spanish, I can't help wondering what Nubes means. Maybe you could add a translation in the opening notes for us ignorant morons?
^.^ I really do hope to see more of this. [Sorry for the long rambling review.]
Krystal_Epyon
Krystal_Epyon@yahoo.com
That said, AFF likes to do this thing where it'll randomly chew up and spit words out. It's happen to a bunch of my fics. So, here's a coupel of places it's happened:
It merely meant a change. A change, a change too heavy for the angel’s light aura todle,dle, [I'm guessin this was 'to handle']
Asast ast attempt to get close to the angels they resorted to the only option left. War. [A last attempt?]
I think there was one more, but I can't seem to find it. >.<
Also, it seems like English isn't your first language, please forgive me if that's totally wrong, but if you'd like me to edit some of the grammar and stuff I'd be happy to. Don't get me wrong, though, it's not too bad, I'm just a perfectionist with my own fics so I assume that others are too.
Oh, and not speaking a word of Spanish, I can't help wondering what Nubes means. Maybe you could add a translation in the opening notes for us ignorant morons?
^.^ I really do hope to see more of this. [Sorry for the long rambling review.]
Krystal_Epyon
Krystal_Epyon@yahoo.com
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First Review? *looks around* ... *ahem*
I love this story. It is wonderful and all you have up is the first part. Your idea\'s are amazing and your writing as well. I do hope you continue writing this story. You truly are gifted with your ideas.
I love this story. It is wonderful and all you have up is the first part. Your idea\'s are amazing and your writing as well. I do hope you continue writing this story. You truly are gifted with your ideas.