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for Only You Sweetheart

by shadesOFgrey

person Anon
schedule May 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Matt is evil. I hope he pays dearly for all the crap he\'s putting her through. >_<
person nohbdy
schedule May 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
aww.... i feel so bad for the poor girl. but the writing\'s real good. keep it up.
person gracie lou
schedule May 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
dang....... this torture is awful........ i mean, the writing\'s great, but poor little charlotte.... i hope in the end she goes back home! and maybe as a plus you can get matt to be tortured to. lol. =P
person Kali
schedule May 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
holy shit man.....i dont really believe in God, not as most people see God anyway, but i must say, u are quite close my friend hehe i have one request though.....KEEP WRITING!!!
person Mista
schedule May 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
\"Nobody ever fucking thinks about how they’re hurting me\"

Sure, Matt, but have you once thought about you hurt others? I didn\'t mind it when he was just psycho, but the way his so-called feelings are coming out, he\'s coming off as a petulant toddler who thinks the world is about them, only them, and damn the rest of the world who doesn\'t coddle or take care of them. I have no problem with controlling abusive men, hell, I don\'t have a problem with controlling abusive men who have a genuine interest and feelings for their \"girlfriends\", but when they become whiny and puppy-eyed, \"why don\'t you love me?\", charm has gone.

Nothing against the story itselt. It\'s well-written as I mentioned before, and the plot moves nicely and there\'s enough twists and turns to keep it interesting. Plus, sadly, there are TONS of people like Matt there out, and you describe his sense of self-entitlement and insecurities beautifully. Still, I just 't s't stand him and had to get it off my chest. It\'s like babysitting a bunch of kindergarteners who\'s constantly throwing tantrums and getting worn out by the annoyance and immaturity. If I was Charlotte, I wouldn\'t scared or turned on, I\'d just be tired and worn out.

person Psychic Wolf
schedule May 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
keep writing..this piece is awesome
person Kal
schedule May 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
holy crap, hun!! omg!! this story just keeps getting better and better! i just DONT want to stop reading it. i dont want it nd hnd hehe anyway keep it up its fantastic
schedule May 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'ve been reading this story from the beginning and I love this new twist. Charolette is finally falling for him. But is this just another one of her tricks? Maybe you should have Matt start to soften up on her and they really are starting to be happy but something screws it up, like having an ex-girlfriend pop up or something. Now Charolette has finally fallen for him and this ex is back so she\'s feeling possesive and jealous and the tables are totally turned with him and her switching places. That would be kinda wacky. whatwhatever you do next, hurry it up. I\'m gonna need another \"fix\" soon.
person Anon
schedule May 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! CHARLOTTE SNAP OUT OF IT!
person Willow Fern
schedule May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG!! UPDATE SOON!!! GOOD CHAPTERS!! Omg omg omg AHHHHHHHHHHHH *prances*