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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heyy this was prtty good
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December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story. Loved the presentation. First Person stories are usually the easiest to get wrong. A bit girlish for my tastes but its all in the spirit of the main character.
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December 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I think this is good. Is there a sequel anywhere in the future?
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October 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
(fans self) well, had i known team sports could be so... kinky, i would have joined in on them a long time ago. where did you go to school? i'm definately going to go back and become a student once more and learn my way through school again, with a hot ass team-sport and teacher (tp fan, right here!)
anyway, so yeah, i'm reading this story, ne? and i couldn't stop thinking about how wonderful my lover would feel right about now. instead, i had to indulge myself with my left hand, my best hand (i'm left-handed) and try to keep the story going with my other hand. plus, i had to be incredibly quiet as i am a morning person and everyone is asleep. (don't worry, i'm not trying to type in my... state. i've already completed my little tryst and will have to definately do some cleaning up when i'm done. ^.^)
so, i guess you want some feedback...? it was seductively hot, tempting, and way erotic. i was turned on from the start, and i hope the two girls can get together. wouldn't that be awesome, if they sent each other erotic letters back and forth. (talk about a al, al, ne?) see, i digress, again, but the story was really well done. i could almost see myself in carla's position, enjoying the comforts of her teammates caresses... mmm....
i have to go... uh.... get (un)dressed...
great job!
ja ne!
~hanyou-elf
(elf_hanyou@yahoo.com)
anyway, so yeah, i'm reading this story, ne? and i couldn't stop thinking about how wonderful my lover would feel right about now. instead, i had to indulge myself with my left hand, my best hand (i'm left-handed) and try to keep the story going with my other hand. plus, i had to be incredibly quiet as i am a morning person and everyone is asleep. (don't worry, i'm not trying to type in my... state. i've already completed my little tryst and will have to definately do some cleaning up when i'm done. ^.^)
so, i guess you want some feedback...? it was seductively hot, tempting, and way erotic. i was turned on from the start, and i hope the two girls can get together. wouldn't that be awesome, if they sent each other erotic letters back and forth. (talk about a al, al, ne?) see, i digress, again, but the story was really well done. i could almost see myself in carla's position, enjoying the comforts of her teammates caresses... mmm....
i have to go... uh.... get (un)dressed...
great job!
ja ne!
~hanyou-elf
(elf_hanyou@yahoo.com)
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September 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was amazing. Your writing is awesome.
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September 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
pfff... *exhaling heavyly* This was a great orgy very well written! very vivid *sigh* ehmmm.. *moaning* you got more coming up soon
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April 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
whoaaaaa that was....descriptive...and....HOT
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March 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
omg that was SO HOT! u have to write some more! i love the idea of all those girls together, i wish there was more femmeslash on this site-maybe u can take care of that! lol, anyway, i thoroughly enjoyed ur story-i especially liked how it was in the letter format, that was very clever. Well keep up the good work!
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March 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
mmmmm.... this is a vry good story. just reading it made me touch myself. ^.^ your a very good writer. thanks for the good story.