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April 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
so far, i have to say that i truly enjoyed reading this and hope your other stories are as good as this one was!
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August 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have tears. Painful and hard and so very real. Well done.
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February 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Fantastic
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December 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...simply delicious. I really love it. Just like all of your other work that is so good. You are just great. Keep up the awesome work and don't stop writing.
I love it, thanks!
:)
I love it, thanks!
:)
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June 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Beautiful, powerful. You have a gift.
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January 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Grjob,job, Andrian! Sorry it\'s taken me a while to review this. When I first read it, I was at a loss as to what to say, and being distracted by a child destroying the dining room didn\'t help. Now I have a little time to collect my thoughts here.
My first impression, I didn\'t like it. But that\'s not a bad thing. What I mean is that it evoked in me feelings I didn\'t want to feel. After all, I read fiction to feel better, not worse. This was depressing, leaving me with a hollow feeling that I didn\'t like. However, that is rather the point isn\'t it? It\'s a mark that it is so well-written that it can affect a reader so, creating such feelings of pain and sympathy for the character.
Frankly, I didn\'t even consider the \'erotica\' category or the sex scene. Although the sex scene is good, it is secondary to the woman\'s pain, her lack of self worth, and her awful relationship with the controlling man. It\'s the age old axiom: \'girls give sex to get love, boys talk love to get sex\'. No matter that he *says* he loves her, it is clear he doesn\'t. He contols her, both with the realtionship and their sexual encounters. He calls her \"little one\" and says \"good girl\", purposely reinforcing his authority (like a father figure) and her feelings of dependency on him. He uses her, and she lets him. Her lack of self worth is so sad, and sadder still is her giving up and accepting that she can never have she she truly wants (and needs). It is terribly sad and poignant.
Damn. Now I\'m depressed again. Time for fluff... (grin)
~ LS
My first impression, I didn\'t like it. But that\'s not a bad thing. What I mean is that it evoked in me feelings I didn\'t want to feel. After all, I read fiction to feel better, not worse. This was depressing, leaving me with a hollow feeling that I didn\'t like. However, that is rather the point isn\'t it? It\'s a mark that it is so well-written that it can affect a reader so, creating such feelings of pain and sympathy for the character.
Frankly, I didn\'t even consider the \'erotica\' category or the sex scene. Although the sex scene is good, it is secondary to the woman\'s pain, her lack of self worth, and her awful relationship with the controlling man. It\'s the age old axiom: \'girls give sex to get love, boys talk love to get sex\'. No matter that he *says* he loves her, it is clear he doesn\'t. He contols her, both with the realtionship and their sexual encounters. He calls her \"little one\" and says \"good girl\", purposely reinforcing his authority (like a father figure) and her feelings of dependency on him. He uses her, and she lets him. Her lack of self worth is so sad, and sadder still is her giving up and accepting that she can never have she she truly wants (and needs). It is terribly sad and poignant.
Damn. Now I\'m depressed again. Time for fluff... (grin)
~ LS
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January 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awesome
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January 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow! What a great story! So very intense and sad. Thank you!
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey Andrian,
I understand that she was his mistress, but did she fall off the railing? Or kill herself? Did I miss something? (I do that sometimes.)
Hey, when are you going to do a sequel to Damaged s? s? Soon, huh?
Cheers!
I understand that she was his mistress, but did she fall off the railing? Or kill herself? Did I miss something? (I do that sometimes.)
Hey, when are you going to do a sequel to Damaged s? s? Soon, huh?
Cheers!
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January 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is the first time I have ever reviewed one of these stories. I usually read them purely for my prurient amusement Your story, however, has something m I I think that your take on this scene is probably more true to life than most of the fantasies one reads here. It certainly sets it apart as more mature.