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December 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow! And WHAT a twist! ^^ This story really stuck out, and so gave it a try. Usually, I don\'t read originals, but this one looked worthy. In recent months, a man came up with a sexual contract condom, so no one can come back later and say it wasn\'t conscentual. Sorry for bringing that up, but that\'s what I was reminded of.
*blinks* Leese is weirding me out. Did I mention I liked the twist? Is it Chris\'s, or is that just what you want me to think? Carla and Vivan are... interesting. ;) And Tori... will she find out?
I got confused a few times when you accidentally used the wrong character name. Like when Leese told Chris that he was marrying Carla next month in chapter 6. Yes, I know you meant Tori, but it still confused me for a second.
Anyway, my point was that this fic has a lot more drama than I expected. From the title I thought there\'d be more comedy, but I\'m glad your female leads are gaining some character development instead. Write more! ^_^
*blinks* Leese is weirding me out. Did I mention I liked the twist? Is it Chris\'s, or is that just what you want me to think? Carla and Vivan are... interesting. ;) And Tori... will she find out?
I got confused a few times when you accidentally used the wrong character name. Like when Leese told Chris that he was marrying Carla next month in chapter 6. Yes, I know you meant Tori, but it still confused me for a second.
Anyway, my point was that this fic has a lot more drama than I expected. From the title I thought there\'d be more comedy, but I\'m glad your female leads are gaining some character development instead. Write more! ^_^
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November 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ack! Write More! Now! LOL! Tis good, very good