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by EinsamerTodescSucher

person SilentSerendipity
schedule December 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, this is another penname of mine... basically, I use my RA penname for writing and drawing things, MW for things that are rather personal, and SS for these adultish sites. But anyhow... I rated this 3 \'cause to me... *blinks* it doesn\'t give the faintest clue of what\'s going on. Or anything. It\'s kind of a prologue, I guess, but even then... *shrugs* I dunno. I just wasn\'t interested.

The storytelling... well, you tend to use things like \"I slowly boarded the rising plane.\" and use that type over and over. Try inverting the words a bit occasionally to avoid monotonous storytelling. For example, that sentence rephrased is \"Slowly, I boarded the rising plane.\" So... yeah.

And my mom pisses over hands. Oh well.

Anyhoo, continue!